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:This article is still mostly Shikisoku's draft that needs to be edited.  It does say right in what you included that "Lord Matsudaira Katamori evaluated their job and gave them new name Shinsengumi." - so the name was changed to Shinsengumi from "Mibu Roshigumi", the first sentence meant that they "(were) named Mibu Roshigumi".  I'll try to edit this today if I get a chance.  --[[User:Shogun|Kitsuno]] 15:41, 16 March 2007 (PDT)
 
:This article is still mostly Shikisoku's draft that needs to be edited.  It does say right in what you included that "Lord Matsudaira Katamori evaluated their job and gave them new name Shinsengumi." - so the name was changed to Shinsengumi from "Mibu Roshigumi", the first sentence meant that they "(were) named Mibu Roshigumi".  I'll try to edit this today if I get a chance.  --[[User:Shogun|Kitsuno]] 15:41, 16 March 2007 (PDT)
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::Right, it does say that but what I was trying to say is that it doesn't say what these two names mean and why it was thought that Shinsengumi was a better name than Mibu Roshigumi.  This could only take a sentence or two to clear up, and I think it would improve the article's clarity.  I realize that this and many of the articles here are still in draft stages, and I wasn't trying to complain or point out error, only to add a friendly suggestion.  Thanks.  [[User:Azuki Arai|Azuki Arai]] 14:40, 17 March 2007 (PDT)
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